Friday, 4 December 2009

by the window
watching the willow
bending in the wind
wondering what freedom
I really have

Modern English Tanka V2 N1 Autumn 2007

7 comments:

Devika said...

This poem really spoke to me, Paul :)

I know I'm in chains in every other aspect....I sort of carry my freedom in my head :)

wishes,
devika

ps: glad to know all going well with you; I too am fine :)

Kristin Riggs said...

Oh...wow, Paul. I feel this one, really! Amazing work!

Frank Williams said...

Like Devika I carry my freedom in my head Paul. A lovely poem...

John McDonald said...

nice group paul
john

Paul Smith said...

Thank you all for your kind comments. This was one of my early attempts at the tanka form and it has aged well I think.

Good to have you back Frank.

Inside our hands, outside our hearts said...

And so it seems we all agree that this piece makes us feel. It also makes me wonder how we question the walls built around us.


Well done.

T

Paul Smith said...

T, thank you for dropping by and leaving a comment, it is appreciated.