Nicely done. I've gone to read up something about Tanka, currently I am trying to write one piece everyday or every second day just to get started, will have toweed the weeds out first then I might e mail you one or two for feedback..but it's wonderful to come read your stuff here, keepit up.....
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Just passed by your blog,n the stay was good. :)
We need our loneliness to write, and to sing too, sometimes...But watching the birds, i always thought...the lonely ones sings the sweetest,
beautiful again, Paul :)
wishes,
devika
Perhaps i should be saying we need to be 'alone' to write...and knowing 'loneliness' is key to a good poet,
thats understood i guess, still wanted to clarify,
wishes,
devika
The repetition of "yes", knowing loneliness more than once?
I really like that.
shootingstar, welcome to Paper Moon. I am glad to hear you enjoyed your first visit. You are welcome any time.
Devika, Pacze Moj & Jason thank you for taking the time to comment. As always it is much appreciated.
Pacze Moi, the repetition of 'yes' as you say could underline that loneliness is / has been experienced more than once.
In writing the poem I used it to break through the robin's persistent song...
yes yes I can hear you...
I understand what you are singing...
I hope that makes sense.
A wonderful juxtaposition of images, Paul...
Thanks Frank, your comments are a source of encouragement.
Hi Paul - I have been enjoying these bird tanka. Good stuff!
so well structured,the pivot so well,the reader can have fun rearranging the reaingof lines arriving at your intial intent each time
much love
gillena
Thank you Dave & Gillena I appreciate your comments very much.
delightful sets as usual Paul
john
Thanks John.
Nicely done. I've gone to read up something about Tanka, currently I am trying to write one piece everyday or every second day just to get started, will have toweed the weeds out first then I might e mail you one or two for feedback..but it's wonderful to come read your stuff here, keepit up.....
That's great to hear LG.
Be natural, honest, open, concise and your work will bloom.
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