Saturday, 28 August 2010

in her presence
words stumble
down the stairs
of my tongue
like elephants


Frank said...

A very elegant tanka, Paul...

lissa said...

words coming down heavy but light with thoughts? wonderful thought you have planted here

Alan Summers said...

Another beautiful tanka! ;-)

all my best,

The With Words International Online Haiku Competition 2010: weblink to competition page

Anonymous said...

Love that!

Paul Smith said...

Thank you all for taking the time to comment.

This is a personal favourite of mine. The image is loaded with awkwardness, but also humour.