Monday, 18 May 2009

unsettled
by the sound of a wasp
this nothingness
that found me waiting
impossible to grasp

Modern English Tanka V3 No2 Winter 2008

5 comments:

Alan Summers said...

Those first three lines are fantastic just on their own.

This tanka (yes, all five lines) is one to read and read and read again.

all my best,
Alan
With Words Online Haiku Competition.

Frank Williams said...

Paul: I agree with Alan a lovely tanka.

Cheers, Frank...

Paul Smith said...

Thanks Alan/Frank your comments are a constant source of encouragement for me.

Beryl Singleton Bissell said...

I want to plunge deeper into this.

Paul Smith said...

Beryl, feel free to 'plunge' & as always thank you for your comment, it means a lot to me.