Wednesday 11 November 2009

a sliver of moon
in the clear night sky
but not
the faintest notion
you were leaving

Lyrical Passion Poetry E-Zine (online November 2009)

10 comments:

Devika Jyothi said...

Oh you said it well, Paul....i've gone through this so many times :)

wishes,
devika

John McDonald said...

well done Paul
john

Margie said...

Oh, wonderful!

Paul Smith said...

Hi Devika, John, Margie, thank you for dropping by and leaving your comments.

Kristin Riggs said...

Oh wow...it's like having my feet knocked out from under me, Paul...The beginning is a happy sigh and then suddenly...heartbreak! So beautifully done. Love it.

Paul Smith said...

Hi Kristin, thank you so much for the feedback, I am really touched.

DickWhyte said...

Paul - wow - this poem is amazing. Just amazing. Excellently composed. An amazing economy of words (particularly on the last line). Just all round WOW WOW.

Keep up the GREAT work.

Paul Smith said...

Thanks Dick, you are as ever a great source of encouragement.

Dave Serjeant said...

Perfect

Paul Smith said...

Dave, thank you, I am touched by your generosity.